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The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph gives information about the US consumer's average
spendings
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spending
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 (measured in US dollars) on mobile
phone
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 and residential
phone
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services
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, on
yearly
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a yearly
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 basis, from 2001 to 2010. A detailed analysis reveals a huge difference in the amount spent on both given call
services
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 in the first given
year
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, around $210
were
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was
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 utilised on cell
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phone
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phones
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 and about $690
used
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was used
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 on local
phone
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 service.
Following
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this
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,
cost
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the cost
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 of cell
phone
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services
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was boost
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was boosted
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 slightly in the next
one
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apply
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year
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,
reached at
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reaching
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 approximately $300,
this
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thrend
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trend
thread
 in each given upcoming
years
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year
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fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 upward a little and reached
at
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apply
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its highest point in 2010,
this
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year
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 US
concumer's
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concumer
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 charges accounted for more than $700.
However
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, residential
phone
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services
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, had represented a slight fluctuation
throghout
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throughout
 all the given years, but it had indicated downward trends, and reached
to
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apply
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approximately $400 in the final
year
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. Interestingly, in 2006, both provided call
services
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had
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apply
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showed
same
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the same
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 expenditures
about
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of about
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 $550.
Overall
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,
although
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 cell
phone
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services
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 went up slowly with the passage of time, charges for local
phone
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services
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 had witnessed a fall in each new
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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