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‏Some people think that interview is not reliable method of choosing whom to employ and there are other better methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Opinions are divided on whether interviews are a valid method to shortlist
candidates
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 for employment by large companies.
This
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 essay strongly opposes
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the view of
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the interview
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interview
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interviews
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 being an unreliable method of choosing employees since
this
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 approach not only evaluates how suitable they are to
workforce
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 environment but
also
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ensure
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ensures
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 finding
potiential
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potential
 ones. It must be acknowledged that interviews can help
recruiter
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a recruiter
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 see whether the applicant
are
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 culturally suited to the
company
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. Specifically, one of the main aims of interviewing applicants is to offer
employer
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employers
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 insights about their traits, including how punctual they are
as well as
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 their working attitude.
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, employers can
catergorize
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categorize
 suitable
candidates
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 who are willing to commit to the
company
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 in the long run,
mnimizing
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minimizing
 changes in personnel.
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, a
company
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 would rather select
candidates
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 who can fit the environment than choose those who have high-qualified
profile
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profiles
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 but cannot adapt to the corporation’s culture. Another worth-mentioning point is that
interview
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 methods these
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 offer fair evaluations. To clarify, when taking the
interview
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,
applicant
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applicants
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 can be assessed through creative criteria methods
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 as scenario-based questions or competency-based assessment.
This
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 way, applicants can have more chances to showcase their skills in various aspects which may not be included in
CV
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a CV
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. To exemplify, a technician when applying to a
company
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 is required to solve
a technological problems
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technological problems
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, allowing them to demonstrate technician knowledge and analytical skills.
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,
this
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 method of selecting
candidates
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 ensures that potential ones will not be overlooked.
On the other hand
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,
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interview
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the interview
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 is believed to be an ineffective way of evaluating employees since it is superficial.
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 because the interviewer is thought to form an initial impression within a few seconds when communicating with
candidates
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 so that if the
candidates
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 underperform, they will receive negative judgements, preventing them from showing their true abilities.
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, many recruiters in large companies are experts in personnel, meaning that they know how to conduct
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 assessment process that results in an optimal outcome. In conclusion, in spite of concerns about hasty judgements,
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interview
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 is still a reliable tool for assessing applicants because of how it assesses
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 suitability
of
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them
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apply
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and provides fairness.

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task achievement
Make sure to provide a stronger introduction that clearly states your position. It should clearly support your arguments throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphs for each main point. Each paragraph should focus on one idea and have a clear connection to your thesis statement.
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Try to expand on the examples you give. More details will strengthen your support for the main points and make it more convincing.
task achievement
You did a good job presenting your main points and using examples to support them.
coherence and cohesion
The essay flowed fairly well, with some good connections between ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interview
  • employ
  • reliable
  • method
  • biased
  • personal opinions
  • candidate
  • fair chance
  • skills
  • talking
  • practical tasks
  • view
  • right skills
  • references
  • past jobs
  • work style
  • abilities
  • realistic setting
  • compare
  • fit
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