The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The bar chart depicts
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the use of food, housing, transport, health care and clothing in America, Canada, the UK and
Japan
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in the year 2009.
Overall
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, the expenditure patterns are different in 4
countries
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. Housing is the most expensive in 3
Countries
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except
Japan
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. In
Japan
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, food shows the highest percentage
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health care and clothing are less expensive compared to other uses. Usage of transportation in Canada is comparatively more by 20% and
Japan
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is at least by 10%,
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the UK and US cover 15% and 13%. In
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Japan
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Japan,
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the sales of food are highest at around 24% and the lowest in the United States at around 14%, In Canada it is sold at 15% and in the United Kingdom by 20%. Housing is the most valuable in all 4
countries
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it is between 22% and 27%. Attaire is sold least in all 4
countries
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by the same around 5% and in healthcare
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it stayed under 5% but in the US, it rose by 2%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • United States
  • Canada
  • United Kingdom
  • Japan
  • 2009
  • spending habits
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food
  • healthcare
  • highest
  • lowest
  • comparison
  • overview
  • significant
  • differences
  • similarities
  • trends
  • summary
  • analysis
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