In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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on TV. As we know reading and
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stakeholder
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and learn new things.
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of knowledge and skill in parenting made the
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eager
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did not help their
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understand
how reading can help them to understand the world.
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role
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the
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how to make the
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something
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unnecessary
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attention to
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of the literature for our young
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generation
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the young
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. most of them spend their time
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the
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videos
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relate to their study.
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online
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to engage with a book.
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by giving parenting
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to the parents. It will help them to understand what should they do as a
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kids
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a
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them from game online,
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it
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will
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influence
them to be lazy and do have
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reading a book and
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watching
important information.
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, reading is the most
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important
thing for all our
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our young
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knowledge and
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information
that help them in the future.
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responsible
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for
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all
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stakeholders
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a condition
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condition
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where our young
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