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Writing Samples
Band 2

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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young people is lazy
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to
reading
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news paper
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newspaper
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 anymore. Every day they
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 a lot of
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to play
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 computer games, games online, and
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Tiktok
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TikTok
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distraction
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 to reduce learning
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disturbed
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scroling
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scrolling
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brain
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addict
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 and reduce skills
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focus. In
a
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addiction
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, one of
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way
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 about few young people read news
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paper
 is about
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habits
from
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they
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 parents.
They
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 parents will be aware
about
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habbit
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habit
habits
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dayly
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daily
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the family
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. If
parent
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did
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make
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a
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educational
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for
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this
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these
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childrent
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children
, that makes
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 habbit for the
childrent
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children
.
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, gift the freedom to use gadget,
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passive
comunicatin
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communication
communicating
communicate
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with
which
 they child, did not
eductable
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deductible
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time
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, and discomfortable the
dayly
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daily
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family
.
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,
Bad
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environtmen
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environment
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be create
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any
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 friends to spend a lot of
time
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 Actually, every single day the children.

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task achievement
Try to clearly state your main idea in the introduction. Use a clear outline, starting from the causes to the solutions.
coherence
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to connect your ideas better. This will help your writing flow more.
coherence
Check your spelling and grammar before submitting. This will help your ideas to come across more clearly.
task achievement
You addressed the topic and provided some examples of distractions affecting young people's reading habits.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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