the working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend . do you agree or disagree

It is been argued whether the
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should be shorter and that the
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should have more free
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others agree with
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statement, I disagree
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because it will lead to a lack in the outcome and
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will have less excitement for
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, if working
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are cut short,
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would cause a shortage in the production of every
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field. Take what happened in COVID-19 as an example. In the United States, the working
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were only 5
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a day.
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caused a dramatic decline, particularly in the food production industries. To illustrate fewer
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will lead not only to less production but
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to detrimental effects on public health.
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to that, it could
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cause chaos since people are going to have more free time.
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, if
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have a longer weekend, they will lose their motivation for
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. When a person takes more
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off, they will come back to
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feeling heavy and not ready to perform, but if they just have a weekend to rest, they will come back motivated to
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, a BBC article shows that 35% of the
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in the UK feel depressed about going back to their jobs after having a vacation. In conclusion,
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some argue that working people should
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fewer
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, I disagree because of the two reasons stated above.

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Try to explain your main ideas more clearly. Use examples that support your points better.
coherence and cohesion
Check that your essay flows well from one point to the next.
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Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
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You have included specific examples, like the COVID-19 reference, which is good for support.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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