The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology that can prevent and solve crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The prevalence of cutting edges causes to decline in crime rates today contrast with the previous years because
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they can prevent and investigate bad accidents. l strongly
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this
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idea because it has a lot of advantages
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as security
cameras
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for individuals especially families and facilitation to identify
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guilty
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police workers. In
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of the preferences for individuals, they
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to protect them from potential theft and attack events through security
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. Today, almost everyone
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alarm and special video system to follow their properties on their phone applications.
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, advancement in technology provides vast opportunities for parents
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their children from dangerous situations in a house when they
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their children without any control. They can easily open a system on their gadgets
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work and try to chase children’s circumstances. To illustrate
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, owing to CCTV
cameras
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, the rate of
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a child fell to
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level in all developed countries.
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, cutting edges
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are crucial for government workers to identify guilties in a short period. Because all facilities and features have surveillance
cameras
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to follow all processes.
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, when police encounter a challenge to find a killer and potential witness for a crime, they prefer to use technological features like GPS
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so on.
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, each entrepreneur and citizen should install surveillance systems
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their properties to decrease
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for
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investigations.
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, based on a report by
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journal, FBI and detectives in
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identify killers approximately 2 days early
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to the past.
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, bad accidents take place less frequently throughout
technologies
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. In conclusion, technological advancements
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a huge success
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crime rates around the world. It provides private security
cameras
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for individuals to protect their
life
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and facilitates all cases for police employees.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • CCTV (Closed-Circuit Television)
  • Deterrent
  • Forensic science
  • DNA testing
  • Digital fingerprinting
  • Analytics
  • Predictive policing
  • Cybercrime
  • Encryption
  • Dark web
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Community policing
  • Public awareness
  • Law enforcement agencies
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