Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

There is no denying the fact that the best way to travel is
travelling
Verb problem
to travel
show examples
in
Use synonyms
group
Add an article
a group
show examples
with a
tour
Use synonyms
guide
Use synonyms
. I totally agree with that because travelling with a
group
Use synonyms
with a
tour
Use synonyms
guide
Use synonyms
is
more safety
Correct word choice
safer
show examples
and allows
people
Use synonyms
to make friendships with other
people
Use synonyms
.
To begin
Linking Words
with, travelling in
Use synonyms
group
Add an article
a group
show examples
with a
tour
Use synonyms
guide
Use synonyms
is
more safety
Correct word choice
safe
show examples
, especially in crowded places which might be
also
Linking Words
unfamiliar to many nations.
In other words
Linking Words
, having a
tour
Use synonyms
guide
Use synonyms
with a
group
Use synonyms
in crowded places
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
show examples
people
Use synonyms
feel that they are in a safe place.
For example
Linking Words
, if a person travels with
Use synonyms
group
Correct article usage
a group
show examples
and they visit a new place, he will feel more safe and comfort with the
group
Use synonyms
than if he
was
Wrong verb form
is
show examples
alone.
Additionally
Linking Words
, travelling with a
group
Use synonyms
with
Change preposition
of
show examples
people
Use synonyms
let
Correct subject-verb agreement
lets
show examples
them make friendships together, and they will have shared experiences.
In addition
Linking Words
to that, travelling with a
group
Use synonyms
might cost less money than travelling alone.
For instance
Linking Words
, many theme parks or gardens offer great discounts for groups
more
Change preposition
of more
show examples
than five
people
Use synonyms
.
As a result
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
will not need to buy huge
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
show examples
of money
for entering
Change preposition
to enter
show examples
these places.
Moreover
Linking Words
, most of the
times
Fix the agreement mistake
time
show examples
, travelling with a
group
Use synonyms
includes the cost of transportation.
To sum up
Linking Words
, nowadays, many
people
Use synonyms
believe that travelling in
Use synonyms
group
Fix the agreement mistake
groups
show examples
with a
tour
Use synonyms
guide
Use synonyms
is the best way to travel, there are a lot of reasons for that. In my opinion, travelling with a
group
Use synonyms
is much safer and it allows
people
Use synonyms
to make
freindships
Correct your spelling
friendships
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Make sure to organize your ideas more clearly. Use paragraphs to separate points.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or details to support your points.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion in your essay.
task achievement
You have included reasons to support your opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • travel
  • group
  • tour guide
  • safety
  • unfamiliar
  • experience
  • friends
  • sightseeing
  • important
  • information
  • historical
  • cost-effective
  • hotel
  • attractions
  • savings
  • affordable
  • freedom
  • explore
  • scheduled
  • scheduled
What to do next:
Look at other essays: