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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key information about the consumption of three basic foods (
wheat
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 , maize and
rice
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) in four different nations. The units are measured in
calories
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.
overall
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, it is clear from the table that the majority of consumption in Cambodia was
Rice
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.
In addition
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,
for
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in
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 Poland most of the people eat
wheat
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,
whereas
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, they are the lowest in Maize among all the countries.
According to
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 what is shown, the community of Egypt are the dominant in
Wheat
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 with 1095
calories
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, and
also
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 they are the second in each type of
food
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.
However
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, Poland is second highest in
Wheat
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 with 865
calories
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 but the lowest in other types of
food
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. In teams of Mexico, Maize has the highest consumption of
food
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 with 1083
calories
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.
On the other hand
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,
Rice
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 was lower compared to other
food
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. For In Cambodia, the majority consumed
Rice
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 with nearly 1500,
However
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,
Wheat
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 was lower than Maiz.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, rice, calories, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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