Question: Some people believe that students should study academic subjects like math and science at university. Others believe that students should be allowed to study whatever they like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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math and science at
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while
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others
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think that they should have the freedom to
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whatever they prefer . In my opinion, I think that
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should choose the
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that they want .
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, I will give my opinion . On the one hand, people think that
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should
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academic
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like math and science Because these
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make
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improve their academic level , if they
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these
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they will have enough knowledge and passion to inquiry
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any other
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and it will be easier for them because these
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are very hard ,
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almost any major at
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include academic
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in United States at Harvard
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it was proven that the
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who studied academic
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performed better than the
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,
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think that
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whatever they like at
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because they think that the
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can do better at the
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that they like, they
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aloud give more passion to the
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that they
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be happier at
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than the
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because they are studying something that they like
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they will make sure that perform better at it . In another
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from different classes but half of them were studying a major that included
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that they liked and The other were the opposite , the result was that the
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that studied the
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that they like were happier that the other
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the
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were under stress and
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they were decided to stop their studies .
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both ways have their reasons but
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think those who think that
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what they like are more convincing, in my opinion, I think that mental health is the most important , if they are happy they will access more.

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