Some people believe work for the same organisation all thier working life. Others think that it is better to work for the different organisations. Duscuss both these views and give your opinion.

Is
Correct your spelling
It
show examples
is believed by
someone
Correct your spelling
some
show examples
that a
career
Use synonyms
inside the same
company
Use synonyms
is the best situation for their working
life
Use synonyms
. Some others think that changing
Use synonyms
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
is a good way to
fasten
Verb problem
speed up
show examples
their
career
Use synonyms
advancement.
Although
Linking Words
working in the same organisation has advantages like developing strong expertise and good relationships with
collegues
Correct your spelling
colleagues
, I think that the
advantages
Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
show examples
to planning proper changes
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
career
Use synonyms
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
an
Correct article usage
the
show examples
opportunity because
this
Linking Words
could be the reason
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
fincrease
Correct your spelling
increase
increased
salary
Use synonyms
and professional status. When a person works for the same
company
Use synonyms
the whole
life
Use synonyms
, it certainly means that he
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
found a good balance between personal satisfaction, goals and
salary
Use synonyms
. For these reasons, and
also
Linking Words
due to
Linking Words
the profound knowledge of the organization and of their
Correct your spelling
colleagues
collegues
Add a comma
collegues,
show examples
he is likely to stay there all working
life
Use synonyms
long. Lots of people find in
this
Linking Words
balance the perfect reason to never change.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
expecially
Correct your spelling
especially
nowadays, going to a
company
Use synonyms
is considered the best way to accelerate
personal
Correct article usage
a personal
show examples
career
Use synonyms
, for professional
avdvancement
Correct your spelling
advancement
reasons
as well as
Linking Words
for
salary
Use synonyms
improvement. In
italy
Change the capitalization
Italy
show examples
,
for instance
Linking Words
, the National Institute for Research, ISTAT, recently published a study that shows a big change in the
job
Use synonyms
market in the
last
Linking Words
20
years
Use synonyms
: in fact, people tend to change
Use synonyms
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
every 3
years
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
average versus an average of 9
years
Use synonyms
, 20
years
Use synonyms
ago. Workers, who were interviewed,
declarated
Correct your spelling
declared
in 65% of cases that it was a precise strategy for
career
Use synonyms
advancement. In my opinion, even if
lot
Change the article
a lot
show examples
of workers think that it might be better to remain in the same
company
Use synonyms
all their working
life
Use synonyms
, as it is positive for their own
worklife
Correct your spelling
work-life
work life
balance, the choice of changing
job
Use synonyms
due to
Linking Words
fasten
Change the verb form
fastening
show examples
professional advancement and gaining higher
salary
Use synonyms
is the way that better fits contemporary
job
Use synonyms
perspectives.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas. Use clear paragraphs for each main point.
task achievement
Make sure your examples are relevant and directly support your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread for spelling and grammar errors, such as 'collegues' should be 'colleagues'.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument well, showing an understanding of the topic.
task achievement
You provide a specific example from Italy, which adds depth to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • career longevity
  • organizational loyalty
  • diverse skillsets
  • career trajectory
  • organizational culture
  • employee retention
  • job market dynamics
  • technological advancements
  • personal growth opportunities
  • job security
  • psychological implications
  • industry changes
  • professional development
  • workplace satisfaction
What to do next:
Look at other essays: