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02 June 2025, If countries are serious about solving traffic problems, they should tax private cars very heavily and use the money to provide free or very cheap rail travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many countries are facing massive traffic problems, especially in the cities.
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 both makes travel difficult and causes
environment
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 damage. In order to solve
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 problem, many people suggest government
to
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build easy access and affordable public
transportation
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 and
gives
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 a high tax
for
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to
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 private
car
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 owners. I agree with
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 opinion because it makes
public
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 think twice
to have
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about having
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 private cars and reduces traffic congestion. First and foremost, many people
decided
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 to buy a
car
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 for reasons of convenience.
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, when the number of owners increases, it has impacts on congestion and air pollution.
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, individuals who commute to work by
car
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 because railways
is
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 hard to access and always crowded.
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, nations should improve their public
transportation
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 as the route, the price, and its capacity. So individuals can use it as an alternative.
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,
to get
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 a
car
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 is very easy nowadays, there is no
a
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strict regulation to get
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.
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, almost all households in the cities have one and prefer to drive
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 of take the bus or train. A survey shows that nearly 80% of city dwellers have at least one and never use public
transportation
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.
That is
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 why, governments should issue strict regulations for
car
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 owners,
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 as increasing vehicle taxes or limiting the
numbers
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 of cars per household. In conclusion, traffic problems can be reduced by advising people to take public
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. To achieve
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, there must be a role for the government in improving public
transportation
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, the money for which can be obtained from high private vehicle taxes.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and conclusion. This makes it easier for readers to understand your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to connect your ideas. This helps make your essay more organized.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. This can strengthen your argument and make it more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with grammar and word choices. For instance, use 'is' instead of 'are' when saying 'the railways is hard to access'.
content
The essay has a clear opinion and addresses an important issue: traffic problems.
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There are good points about public transportation improvement and tax policies for private car owners.
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