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Band 3

Nowadays, more people move away from their friends and families for work. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

These days number of
people
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 shift for
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job
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jobs
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 by leaving their loved ones like friends and families.
Job
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 is the part of life which can give you opportunity anywhere in
world
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 that does have more advantages than disadvantages. When leaving loved ones for
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job
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a job
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, makes
people
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 more
socialize
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social
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 and ready to tackle problems regardless of any situation. Either it can be
work related
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work-related
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 or personal issues. Being
adult
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an adult
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, becomes more extrovert than ever before because has to handle his outside work regarding important work. It
makes
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 strong enough to
take
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make
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decision
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decisions
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by
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on
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their
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its
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 own. If any issue occurs in
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job
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the job
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, being socialized can build
problem solving
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skill
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skills
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 gradually. Being alone and away from home will teach
individual
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individuals
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 to become emotionally and mentally strong. These attributes help
in
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me in
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 future if, need to relocate to another area for
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job
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the job
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.
For instance
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, My childhood friend Suresh
had
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left home at the age of 5 for the sake of education and
furthermore
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 for his career. Now, he is
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a vey
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vey
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very
 successful businessman in
multinational
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a multinational
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 company. In conclusion, leaving behind your family and friends for the
job
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 has more advantages than disadvantages.
people
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gets
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get
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 more reliant on their own for any decision and
does
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do
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 not ask for other
people
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's
opinion
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opinions
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.
Also
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, it gives
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to interact with
knowledge
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knowledgeable
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 and
skillful
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skilful
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 person for the gaining
of
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apply
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experience of that person.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. This helps guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Try to use linking words like 'however' or 'furthermore' to connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples or explanations to support your main points.
task achievement
You expressed your thoughts well about how working away from family can help personal growth.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion nicely summarizes your main view on the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career advancement
  • job opportunities
  • job market
  • salaries
  • personal growth
  • cultural horizons
  • adaptability
  • resilience
  • global perspective
  • emotional and psychological impact
  • loved ones
  • loneliness
  • homesickness
  • support network
  • long-distance relationships
  • emotional strain
  • face-to-face interactions
  • financial cost
  • housing deposits
  • travel costs
  • living expenses
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