The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
number
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of candidates for multiple
task
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at
social
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a social
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centre in Melbourne for the duration
2000
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of 2000
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to 2020. In
generally
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general
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Australians are doing five activities;
such
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as film club,martial arts,amateur dramatics,table tennis and musical performances. At
the
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apply
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first glance over
the
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apply
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sixty competitors participated
for
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in
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film
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the film
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club.
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Also
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these competitors are stable between 2000 to 2020.
Lowest
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The lowest
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number
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of
candidate
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candidates
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joined musical performances in 2000.
Therefore
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in 2020 lowest
number
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of members participated
for
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in
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amateur dramatics.
Secondly
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minimum contributors available
on
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in
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table tennis, but in 2020 it
was
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increased dramatically.
In
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addition
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addition,
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amateur dramatically in 2000 moderately,but
2020
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in 2020
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it
was decrease
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decreased
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slowly.
Also
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number
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of members for material art was
moderately
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moderate
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through
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throughout
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the year.
To sum up
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, all the competitors without film
club
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clubs
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are change
the
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apply
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through
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throughout
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the year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • activities
  • social centre
  • popular
  • decline
  • increase
  • trend
  • interest
  • introduced
  • participants
  • peak
  • creative
  • physical
  • compared
  • features
  • summarise
  • reporting
  • period
  • changed
  • growing
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