The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph indicates the level of
participation
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in various leisure
activities
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between Australian
boys
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and
girls
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aged 5 to 14 years old. It shows what percentage of each group
have
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enjoyed these
activities
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, and shows which
activities
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are more popular by gender. In general, the
boys
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in
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age group engage in a higher number of included leisure
activities
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than the
girls
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, with higher
participation
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levels in all
activities
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except arts and crafts. As we can see, watching TV and videos is the most popular activity for children in
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age group with 100% of the
boys
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and
girls
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surveyed having been involved. The least popular activity
overall
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is skateboarding/roller-blading, as it saw the lowest
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participation
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rate amongst the
boys
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and
girls
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, at around 38% and 28% respectively. The
boys
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show a preference for electronic games, which were enjoyed by 80% of them, and outdoor
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,
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as bike riding,
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in which
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70% of all
boys
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surveyed had participated
in
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. They were less interested in arts and crafts. The
girls
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on the other hand
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took part in bike riding, electronic games, and arts and crafts at similar rates, with all at around 60%
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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state the main features and trends in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider adding a conclusion to summarize the key points you discussed.
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Include more specific numbers or comparisons between boys and girls for each activity.
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The essay has a clear introduction and presents the main activities.
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The comparisons between boys and girls are well noted, showing an understanding of the data.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Participation rates
  • Leisure activities
  • Notable differences
  • Popularity
  • Trends
  • Time period
  • Comparison
  • Contrast
  • Gender preferences
  • External factors
  • Implications
  • Cultural influences
  • Facilities availability
  • Technological effects
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