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The given table illustrates the proportions of attendance in secondary schools in India. These values are given from 2000 to 2015 with a gap of 5 years.

The given table illustrates the proportions of attendance in secondary schools in India. These values are given from 2000 to 2015 with a gap of 5 years.
The table chart displays the percentage of attendance in secondary
schools
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 in India over a
period
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 of 15
years
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, starting from 2000.
overall
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, it is evident that attendees from the most mentioned categories experienced a significant increase over the entire
period
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, except for general English medium
schools
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, which fluctuated slightly.
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, the convent-run
schools
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 category was the highest in admitting students throughout the time span. In terms of government
schools
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 in the city and village , city
schools
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 had the highest number of students in all mentioned
years
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 compared to village
schools
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 and increased gradually from just over 60% in 2000 to around 80% in 2015.
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 village govt. institutes had the lowest number of attendees over the whole
period
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, it around doubled its pupils
at the end
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 of the
period
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 . the proportion of General English medium
schools
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 dropped slightly from 52% in 2000 to 49% after 5
years
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,
However
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,
this
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 figure saw a gradual rise over the next 10
years
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 and
finally
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 reached 59% in 2015. Another significant category is convent-run
schools
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, which always got the highest number of students throughout the entire
period
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 with attendees of over 80% in 2000 to nearly 90%
at the end
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 of the time span.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, period, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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