Many companies are increasingly using artificial intelligence (AI) to replace human workers. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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world, lots of large
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of actually hiring human workers. in
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believe the disadvantages are heavier than the advantages of
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risky move. Depending on AI machines to do the work for us can lead to highly dangerous consequences, first being regular humans will lose their jobs leading to a poor society and eventually a famine. No jobs available in the market means no people are working, in
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a lot of people will become lazy and obese, if that happens large portion of
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because of obesity side effects. All
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not necessarily mean that using AI is all bad there is sure
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it. Hiring AI can be
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help for smaller companies and startups since it does not require
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pay for their service just press the button and the work is done. Another good pro for using machines
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can do the work
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a shorter time, another way to describe
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proactive. To sum it up, even though using AI can lead to major societal problems, it has it still has
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benefits that
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companies lean towards using them.

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task response
Your introduction needs a clearer outline of your main points. It should state the advantages and disadvantages explicitly.
coherence
Work on linking your ideas better. Use words like 'however' and 'on the other hand' to connect your points.
task response
You presented some relevant points on the disadvantages of AI, which is a good start.

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