Write a letter to the cinema manager to inform him/her that you have lost your bag in the cinema. In your letter you should - tell exactly what happened and when - explain where you think you left the bag - ask the manager to help find your bag.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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letter to help me find my
bag
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which I mistakenly left in the cinema hall
last
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night. I and my friend yesterday booked tickets for the newly released movie,
the hit
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The Hit
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at your cinema location. To add more details, the show commenced at 9 in the evening and wrapped around midnight. After the show was over
while
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evacuating the hall which was number 8, I forgot about
o take
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taking
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my
bag
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with me. Actually what happened exactly was that during
interval
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the interval
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of the
movie
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movie,
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I grabbed some food from the available food counter in the hall and there
were
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was
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no more room for my
bag
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on my lap so I kept it under my seat, in row G number 8. So I believe it should be there only unless the
clearners
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cleaners
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have found it and deposited it
to
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in
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the lost and found centre of the mall. To make it easier for you to identify the
bag
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, it is a black colour coach side
bag
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with coach written in golden
color
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colour
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at the bottom left corner. The
bag
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is very important
for
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to
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me as it contains my
driver
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driver's
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license and some bank cards as well so I would really be grateful
of
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to
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you if you could help me
finding
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find
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my purse. Look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Navneet Kaur

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task response
Try to provide a clearer beginning that explains why you're writing the letter in the first paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied sentences to keep the reader engaged.
task response
You clearly stated what happened and when, which is important for the manager to understand your situation.
task response
Your description of the bag is detailed, which will help in identifying it quickly.
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