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The diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided maps
gives
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 information about changes that have
accoured
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occurred
 in a
school
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 from 1985 and the present time.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of
the
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apply
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student
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students
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 increased as well new facilities have taken
a
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place in the
school
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,
whereas
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 the playing
fields
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field
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 size decreased
also
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 the streets inside the
school
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 have been removed
as well as
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 the library. In greater detail, the library
in
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on
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 the west side
have
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 been replaced with
learning
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a learning
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 resources center and computer room.
In addition
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, there are new classrooms,
pool
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a pool
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, and
fitness
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a fitness
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center
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centre
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in
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on
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 the
south west
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southwest
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 side of the
school
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, which was previously playing fields.
Moreover
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, now there is
a
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an
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 additional classroom
the
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on the
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 east side of the
school
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.
However
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, the car park inside the
school
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 and the streets that connected with the main
streest
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street
streets
 outside to the playing fields have been removed. The office
remain
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 the same.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructural developments
  • primary school building
  • sports field
  • car park
  • basic layout
  • expansion
  • facilities
  • modernization
  • refurbished
  • student intake
  • educational needs
  • capacity
  • faculty
  • contemporary
  • physical education
  • extracurricular activities
  • greenery
  • ecological efforts
  • aesthetic improvement
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