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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line charts represent how many subscribers to mobile and fixed phone lines
people
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 in four different
countries
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 make as recorded in 2005. A brief overview is that the majority of
countries
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 had more
people
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 to pay for mobile phone
subscriptions
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 than
the
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apply
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fixed ones.
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, the fixed telephone figures in all four
countries
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 seemed not to change over the given period.
This
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 analysis will start with the first diagram which shows out of a hundred
people
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 how many of
whom
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them
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 had
subscriptions
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.
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 Regarding India, the Indian interest in mobile phone
subscriptions
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 significantly thrived from 5 to 75 per hundred
people
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 in 15 years.
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, Uruguay had quite a similar approach where its figures saw a considerable climb from 40 prior to peaking at 160 in 2013 only to modestly decline to 150 sharp. Turning to the remaining twos, in
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 and Eritrea, the number of
people
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 subscribing tended not to change over the time period, at 100-125 and 2-5
subscriptions
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 per hundred
people
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. Attention will now turn to the other chart. There were near parities among the four
countries
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' figures, at 50-60 for the British, 30-35 for
people
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 in Uruguay and 3-8 for the two
last
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countries
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, subscriptions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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