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The diagram shows life cycle of the shrimp. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram shows life cycle of the shrimp. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The image illustrates
general
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 life span of the Gulf of Mexicos
shrimps
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, especially focusing on three predominant types
such
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 as brown, white and pink
ones
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apply
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. Each individual
of
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in
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this
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 evolutionary
progress
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process
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 begins with eggs,
then
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 goes through several stages of development and ultimately turns into a fully mature shrimp. In the first period,
shrimps
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 laid eggs in open water. The female species keep eggs under their abdomen to hatch by
bodys
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body
body's
 temperature within a whole day. Once hatched, new-born
shrimps
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 called Nauplius drift freely in open water,
then
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 develop into Protozoea which
considered
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as
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plankton in biological
term
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. At
this
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 stage, they are still underdeveloped and lack the features of adult
shrimps
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. During the ongoing evolution, they become Mysis which start to have
completely
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 different appearance
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 to the former and slightly resemble the mature individuals. For the rest of the period, when
shrimps
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 enter
Postlarvae
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the Postlarvae
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 stage, they are carried to shoreward by wind and water currents. These marshes are often ideal habitats for
shrimps
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 because they provide protection and nutrients, enabling Postlarvae to grow into Juvenile level. The Juvenile after that
migrate
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migrates
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 back to swampy or shallow areas where they
involve
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are involved
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 in
Semi-mature
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a Semi-mature
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 form. At
this
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 time,
shrimps
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 have developed body structures and physiological functions that are similar to the adult. In the end, Sub-adult
shrimps
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 continue to undergo several
molts
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moults
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 and gradually acquire adequate development before reaching full maturation. Adults, after that, return to the ocean and spend the rest of their life there for up to two years
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 repeat the lifespan by breeding.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shrimps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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