You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
The line graph traces the evolution of the percentage
about
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the
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women employed in
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USA
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the USA
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,
Korea
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, Afghanistan, and France spanning from
1985to
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1985 to
1995.
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, it is notably seen in the
USA
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,
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, and France witnessed
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upward trends,
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contrast
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Afghanistan
was faced
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downward trends in the periods of the year 1985 to 2005 In detail,
USA
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and
Korea
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shared
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similar trends ,
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USA
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the USA
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starting from 45% ,and gradually increased to 65% in 2000, after that decreased
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5% to 60%
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of the year. In the case of
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Korea
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Korea,
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the figure showed a significant
grew
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from 20% to nearly 35% in the next
15years
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15 years
. Afterwards constantly goes up to nearly 40%
in
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the end of the year. The percentage of
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France fluctuated from 1985 to 1995 in the range of
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10% from 30% to
40%, slightly rose to 55%,
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maintain
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stable in the following 5 years.
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, Afghanistan steadily
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from 30% to 40% ,after 1995
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by 10% in 2000 and constantly decreased until 0% in 2005.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, korea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of women employed
  • employment trends
  • notable changes
  • significant increases and decreases
  • periods of stability
  • specific years and percentages
  • overall trend
  • compare and contrast
  • similarities and differences
  • throughout the period
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