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Writing Samples
Band 3

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.

There is no denying the fact that working days should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.
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 it is
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commonly
held to belied
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 that
employes
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 must have
less
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fewer
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 working days and they deserve an extra weekend. there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
employes
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employees
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defenitly
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definitely
 need
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longer weekends.
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 with, studies show that working
few
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hours
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accutily
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actually
 boost productivity.
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 when working for
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 amount of
hours
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 can help to get new ideas and be
cretive
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creative
.
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, When
people
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 are well-rested, they tend to focus better, make fewer mistakes, and complete tasks faster.
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 that work 5
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 and sleep 12
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 are most likely to be more creative and
geeting
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get
 things done. Another point to consider, overworking can cause stress
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mental issues and other health problems. it is
also
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 possible to say that
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more
hours
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 work can
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actually
effect
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 your mental health.
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moreover
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 a shorter workweek allows time for exercise, sleep, hobbies, and social activities, which all contribute to
overall
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 well-being.
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,
people
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 who
exccrsise
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exercise
 more often
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seem to be
more
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heltiher
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healthier
 than the
people
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 that
dont
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don't
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work out
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. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that many
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employees
 absolutely
deserves
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 an extra
days
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day
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 off.

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task achievement
Make sure your thesis statement in the introduction is clear and strong. It should clearly say what your opinion is.
coherence and cohesion
Use more paragraphs to separate your ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea and some details.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling. For example, 'belied' should be 'belief' and 'employes' should be 'employees'.
task achievement
You have good ideas about why a shorter workweek is better.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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