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The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three European countries between 2007 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of European
households
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 that
using
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 the
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internet
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Internet
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 from 2007 to 2019.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the figures of both urban and rural
households
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 increased throughout the timeline.
Additionally
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, the percentage of urban
households
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accessed to
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accessing
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 the
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internet
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 was always higher than that of rural
households
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 over the timeframe. Looking forward to the first 3 years, urban
households
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 started with about 15%
accessing
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access
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 to the
internet
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 at the beginning and increased gradually to 40% in the year
of
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2001.
Similarly
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, the using
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internet
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Internet
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households
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 in rural areas began
with
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at
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 nearly 1% in 1999 but
then
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 climbed up steadily to 10% in 2001, which means its data was 4 times lower than that of
surburban
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suburban
households
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. Moving on to the remaining years, the urban
households
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 percentage of using the
internet
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 was now increasing slowly from 50% in 2002 to approximately 55% in 2004
while
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 that of rural
households
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 jumped up rapidly to nearly 35%
at the end
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 of the time period after started with almost 15% in the year of 2002.
Moreover
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,
although
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 the statistics of urban
households
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still
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are still
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 higher than rural areas
households
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 but
it
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is
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 just about
20
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a 20
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%
of
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apply
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difference.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Household internet access
  • Percentage (%)
  • European countries
  • Twelve-year period
  • Technological advancement
  • Digital connectivity
  • Yearly/periodic growth
  • Significant increase
  • Government initiatives
  • Technological breakthroughs
  • Rapid growth
  • Policy changes
  • Infrastructure development
  • Economic factors
  • Plateaus
  • Saturation points
  • Societal impacts
  • Economic impacts
  • Remote work
  • Digital commerce
  • Future projections
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