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The charts below show the result of a questionnaire thet asked visitors to the parkway hotel how they rated the hotel's customer services. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010

The charts below show the result of a questionnaire thet asked visitors to the parkway hotel how they rated the hotel's customer services. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010
The pie charts tell the information about the
result
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results
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 of
questionnaire
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a questionnaire
the questionnaire
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 which was given to 100 guests of the Parkway Hotel in two distinct years. Taking everything into account, there
were
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was
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 a rise value of positive customer service
level
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levels
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such
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 as, excellent, and good.
This
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 means that
client’s
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the client’s
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 treatment
was
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showed
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considerable
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a considerable
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 upward trend.
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 the negative services comment had
fall
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 over in question. It can be seen from the charts that the ratio of excellent
comment
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comments
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 was 5% in 2005,
increased
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 by 13% in 2010.
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, the portion of good satisfaction was 14% in 2005,
experienced
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and experienced
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 25% growth in 2010.
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, the dissatisfaction
of
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with
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 customer trends went in the opposite direction. The satisfactory grade has
significant
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a significant
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 decline from 45% to 17% in 2005 and 2010. That was the highest drop in the amount of 28 %. The second
down fall
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downfall
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 rate was poor from 15% to 4%,
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 the very poor section decreased at least from 21% to 9% in the picture.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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