While
globalisation brought the advancement of technology, most employers or companies require Linking Words
high skills
employees with Correct your spelling
high-skilled
wide
range of knowledge. These requirements lead to a debatable question : did children can follow their passions or Add an article
a wide
response
to financial concerns in career paths ? In the following paragraph, I will explain both of those perceptions.
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respond
apply
terms of reality, Verb problem
apply
almost
persons discuss that students should concentrate Correct your spelling
most
about
their future, Change preposition
on
which
most Correct word choice
and
people
are Use synonyms
parents
or Use synonyms
the
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apply
elder
who Fix the agreement mistake
elders
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are concern
concern
about their kids' future. Replace the word
concerned
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This ideas
are not suitable for every young Change the determiner
This idea
These ideas
persons
, if someone Change to a singular noun
person
have
their own strong passion, Change the verb form
has
parents
should release them to their own decisions. If not, it will bring them to aggressive action Use synonyms
such
as leaving home or depression are affected by domestic pressures. Linking Words
For example
, when my uncle was a high school student, he Linking Words
dream
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dreamed
to become
a professional football player; Change preposition
of becoming
however
, my Linking Words
grand
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grandparents
parents
did not allow him, andUse synonyms
a
result, he failed their university application and Change preposition
as a
also
Linking Words
loss
his dream together. Replace the word
lost
Nonetheless
, many Linking Words
people
who follow Use synonyms
Use synonyms
parents'
plans succeed Correct pronoun usage
their parents'
their
working life.
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in their
On the other hand
, I dramatically agree with Linking Words
people
who seek their dreams Use synonyms
due to
I am the one who Linking Words
find
my Change the verb form
finds
ways
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way
of
between passions and business. From 5 working years Change preposition
apply
experience
, I Change preposition
of experience
meet
and Wrong verb form
met
visit
numerous Wrong verb form
visited
cilents
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clients
that they
Correct pronoun usage
who
enhance
me to growVerb problem
encouraged
up
, Change preposition
apply
becoming to
better Wrong verb form
become
of
my own version. Change preposition
at
However
, if Linking Words
i
decide to be Change the capitalization
I
a
accountant like my parent expected, I will feel sad and unhappy Change the article
an
in
my bad decision.
In my conclusion, everyone has their own passions and dreams; Change preposition
about
Linking Words
however
someone Add a comma
however,
have
Change the verb form
has
burden
of financial concerns that can not follow their needs. I think Correct article usage
a burden
this
topic is not other concerns, but many Linking Words
people
should decide with their own conditions and situation for their lifestyle.Use synonyms
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