The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the graph provides key information about the Australian workforce in five
industries
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between 1962 and 2012 , the information
measured
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in percentage .
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, there are 5 five
industries
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and they are service and manufacturing and agriculture and construction and mining , it's clear from the graph that most of the
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shown a massive decline and there are 2 of them showing a slight increase .
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what
shown
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, the service sector inclined from nearly 50
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percent
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in 1970 to almost 80
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percent
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in 2010 , manufacturing
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dropped from almost 25
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percent
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to 10
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percent
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in 2010 , and agriculture showed a decline in the percentage from nearly 10
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to almost zero in 2010 , construction and mining showed the same steady percentage even after the end period . in conclusion , we notice that service is the dominant to all
industries
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in the mentioned period.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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