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The line graph show the percentage of renewable energy generation over total allergy products in sick country from 2010 to 2013 samurai the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make the comparison where relevant

The line graph show the percentage of renewable energy generation over total allergy products in sick country from 2010 to 2013 samurai the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make the comparison where relevant
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of renewable energy generation over total allergy products in six countries from 2010 to 2013. It is immediately noticeable that Germany had significant growth over the period,
while
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 others seem slightly
rose
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over the period.
However
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, only the USA and
India
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 had a
particularly
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 drop in 2011 by 2%,
then
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 the USA rapidly grew
up
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 over 20% in the next year, but
India
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 slightly increased to the same
at
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 2010. Looking more deeply into the trends, Germany steadily moved up from 17% to 25% since 2010.
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, others lightly raised
about
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approximately 2% to 3%, except
India
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, which remained stable compared between 2010 and 2013 about 17.5%.
Lastly
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, the rank of
this
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 information only changed for the first three countries, and in 2010, the final progression was Germany, USA,
India
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, Spain, France, and China.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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