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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the layout of the ground floor of a library in 2001 and the changes made to it by 2009.
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, the library underwent significant modernization, with several book sections being replaced by multimedia areas and a new children's area being added.
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, some features
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 as the librarian’s desk and the stairs remained unchanged. In 2001, the west side of the library included Self-help and History books,
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 the Fiction section occupied the entire top part. The central area featured several tables, with Newspapers and Periodicals nearby. By 2009, major changes were made. The
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 tables were removed and replaced with a new Children’s area, and the Fiction section was relocated to the west,
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 new sections: Kitchen, Economics, and Law. The Newspapers and Periodicals section was removed and replaced by Films and DVDs. Despite the changes, the entrance, librarian’s desk, and stairs stayed in the same position.

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Ensure to include all key features by clearly presenting each change in detail. This could improve the completeness of your response.
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You provided a clear comparison between the two years, noting important changes in sections.
coherence
The essay has a logical structure, with a clear introduction and comparison.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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