Today, some food travels travel thousands of miles from farms to consumers, Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat local food. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the advantages?
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task achievement
You need to clearly state your main ideas and give specific examples to support them. Make sure to develop your points fully.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your essay better. Use clear paragraphs for each point: introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
language
Watch your spelling and grammar. Words like 'there' should be 'their' and 'moor' should be 'more'.
content
You've made a good effort to address the topic of healthy food.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
It is true that school children used to learn by hearing from their teachers and with the help of books in the past. However, recently, a number of school pupils have studied by utilizing technology in the classroom. In fact, there are various merits and demerits for these changes.
I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing this letter to inform you about working in your company where you referred to me. First of all, I would like to thank you for giving me the opportunity to work in a highly reputable company.
Science opens up a wide range of possibilities for students' future, including employment. Currently, however, some students do not take science classes in college. This essay will discuss why they tend not to take science classes and the problems caused by this trend.
It is widely believed that investing a huge budget in skills or vocational training for practical work is a better way to promote economic growth than in college education. I disagree with this argument, so would like to explain my instance that all these sectors should receive the same prioritization from governments as each might be suitable for other groups and purposes.
Globalisation has enabled an easier movement of goods, services and people across borders and people moving abroad with their families looking for work opportunities have increased in the recent years. Children in the family are usually the most affected by this decision. It is believed by some people to be beneficial for them while others look at it as a great problem for the children. In this essay, we will discuss both sides of the argument and provide an opinion as well.