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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart compares the percentage change in average
house
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prices
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 in five major
cities
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—New York, Tokyo,
London
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, Madrid, and Frankfurt—during two periods (1990–1995 and 1996–2002), using 1989 as the base year.
Overall
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,
house
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prices
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 declined in most
cities
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 during the first
period
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,
while
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 the second
period
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 saw a recovery, particularly in
London
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, which experienced the most significant increase.
In contrast
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, Tokyo had the sharpest decline. In the early
period
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 (1990–1995),
house
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prices
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 fell in four out of five
cities
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.
London
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 and Tokyo witnessed the most considerable drops, at approximately -8% and -7%, respectively. New York and Madrid experienced smaller declines,
while
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 Frankfurt was the only city where
prices
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 rose, albeit modestly, by around 2%. During the second
period
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 (1996–2002),
house
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prices
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 rebounded in most
cities
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.
London
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 saw a dramatic surge, with
prices
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 reaching nearly 13% above 1989 levels—the highest among all
cities
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. New York and Madrid
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 recorded moderate increases of about 5% and 4%, respectively. Frankfurt maintained a relatively stable trend, and Tokyo’s
prices
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 showed a slight recovery, though they remained roughly 5% below the 1989 benchmark.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, prices, london, cities, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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