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The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 from different
age
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-
population
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 going to the
cinema
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 over three decades , between 1978
to
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 2008.
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, the trend of
people
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 going to the
cinema
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 is fluctuating. There was a noticeable decrease in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
people
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 visiting the
cinema
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 between 1978 and 1988 among all
age
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 groups. After 1988, a dramatic increase in the number of
people
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 visiting the
cinema
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 can be observed until the final year of 2008. The young
population
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 (
age
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 group 14-26) constituted the majority of the
population
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 going to the
cinema
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whereas
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 the older
population
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 (
age
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 group over 50 ) were the lowest to visit the
cinema
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.
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, 90% of the young
population
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 was observed going to the
cinema
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 in 1978 compared to only 40% of
people
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 over 50 years of
age
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. That being said, there was a dramatic increase in number of the individuals above 50 going to the
cinema
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 after the year 1988. Unlike young individuals who are below 24 years of
age
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 who had almost a steady trend of going to the
cinema
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 throughout the given period (except the dip seen in 1988), the
age
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 populations between 25 to 49 years of
age
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 showed clear fluctuation, where the period between 1988 to 1998 witnessed a significant decrease in the number of
people
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 going to the
cinema
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cinema, age, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age group
  • cinema
  • visit
  • month
  • country
  • decrease
  • increase
  • steady
  • consistent
  • habits
  • trend
  • attend
  • participation
  • interest
  • audiences
  • shift
  • preferences
  • visitors
  • data
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