The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.
The provided charts give information about the fraction of gender based on the various
age
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groups in 1984 in
France
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and
India
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. A detailed analysis reveals that, in
France
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, females under the
age
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of 40 were only about 4%.
However
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, above 40 and till the final given
age
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group,
this
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share decreased moderately and reached
at
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apply
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nealry
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nearly
3%. In
India
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,
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the females
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females
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female
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proportion was highest, in the initial
age
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category,
about
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at about
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6.8%;
conversely
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, with each above
age
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group
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group,
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this
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figure fell slightly and was observed
approximately
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at approximately
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1% in the final
age
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group.
Male
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The male
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section, in
France
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, had witnessed only a small fraction of people in all provided
age
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groups, just
remained
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remaining
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between 4% to 0.5%. In
India
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,
whereas
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,
portion
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a portion
the portion
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of men was higher
slighty
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slightly
, between 6.8% to 1.5%.
Overall
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, in
India
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, at
very
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a very
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young
age
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both
gender
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genders
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had witnessed
a
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the
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highest share, whilst,
this
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figure
slow
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slowed
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down afterwards. Interestingly, in
France
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, males and females were
least
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the least
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prevalent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, france, india with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • age structure
  • populations
  • France
  • India
  • 1984
  • overall
  • different
  • evenly distributed
  • proportion
  • young people
  • elderly individuals
  • largest age group
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