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The chart shows the information relating to people within 15 minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.

The chart shows the information relating to people within 15 minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.
The given data compares the percentages of residents in a specific region in the UK who live within
15-minute
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a 15-minute
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 drive distance to four distinct services: doctor, post office, primary school, and secondary school. The individuals are categorized
by
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into
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 two groups, people living in cities and individuals living in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
Overall
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, all residents accommodating in both areas are able to arrive at not only hospitals and clinics but
also
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 secondary schools.
By contrast
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, the ratios are not similar in the other two facilities for each category. In detail, all citizens in urban areas reside within 15 minute drive
all
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of all
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 four facilities.
Similarly
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, secondary school and doctor services are available in the proximity of residences in rural areas.
In contrast
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, only 60% of countryside dwellers can reach primary schools in
15-minute
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15 minutes
 by transport.
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,
accommodation
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the accommodation
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 of 90% of suburban residents is located within
15-minute
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a 15-minute
the 15-minute
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 distance of post offices.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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