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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map depicts the design of a university
sports
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center
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centre
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 now and how it will look after its renovation.
Overall
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, some new facilities including
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sports
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a sports
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 shop, changing rooms, a café, dance studios, seating and a big outdoor
pool
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 will be added. Both
of
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outdoor
courts
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 will be removed and the main
25 meters
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25-meter
pool
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 will remain unchanged.
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, the entrance is sited in
south
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the south
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 and across from it is the reception. A
25 meters
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25-meter
pool
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 is located in the center of the facility, surrounded by a changing room on the left,
a
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seating on the right and a gym behind it. There are
two
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 big outdoor
courts
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 in
eastern
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the eastern
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 and western
site
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 of the main facility. After renovation, the
sports
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center
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centre
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 undergoes some big changes. A café and a
sports
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 shop will be added on either side of the entrance, and
two
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 new changing rooms will be constructed on the right and left southern corners of the map, the old one will remain unchanged.
Two
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 outdoor
courts
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 will be removed to make more space for the gym to be expanded to the east, next to the
two
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 newly constructed dance studios, and adding a new
sports
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 hall by the seating. In the west, the old outdoor
courts
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 will be swapped with a leisure
pool
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly compare the current and future layouts more explicitly. For example, you could specify what is gained and lost in terms of sports facilities.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more logically. You could group information about changes before and after separately to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Add a brief conclusion summarizing the main changes at the end of your essay for completeness.
task achievement
You have identified the main features of the redevelopment well.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a good structure, making it easy to follow the changes in the map.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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