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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing sof skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people believe that getting
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education
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 is the only way to receive a great position with
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 career ladder. Others claim that in today's world obtaining experience and developing critical thinking can be even more beneficial. Personally, I believe that some occupations
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 doctors or lawyers require tertiary
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value soft skills and abilities to solve problems. On the one hand, it is thought by some individuals that
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 plays a key role in securing a well-paid job.
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 is because the university's curriculum was made to prepare professionals
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 their future
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 and contains all
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 knowledge.
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, these people just need to follow the program to receive a diploma and
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, all doors are open for them.
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, some people argue that in universities students receive just theoretical knowledge which cannot prepare them
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real life and challenges on their way.
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, living in a fast-changing and frantic world we should adapt to new circumstances in the blink of an eye.
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, those who want to be on the top, should always refine their skills and learn throughout life. Summing up, I tend to believe that both approaches are beneficial, it depends on the profession. I think, if someone wants to become a physician they should receive tertiary
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 in order to confirm their training and the level of knowledge.
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, if
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a person
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 wants to
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 their own business it is better to develop
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 skills as critical thinking and
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 rather than go to the university.

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Clarify your position more strongly in the conclusion.
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The introduction states the topic clearly and presents both sides.
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The discussion of both sides shows a good understanding of the topic.
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The essay has a clear structure with separate paragraphs for each point.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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