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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the
informations
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information
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 about India's GDP elements from 1960 to 2000. The value of the score
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is records
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records
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recorded
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 in percentage.
Overall
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, The agriculture
sector
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 played a vital role in the
1960
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1960s
,
while
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 the services
sector
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took
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became
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as
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a
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 dominant
components
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component
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for
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of
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 India's GDP in 2000. As we know from the picture
that
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apply
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the
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apply
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agricultural
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agriculture
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 peaked
the
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at the
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 highest percentage in 1960 at 63 %.
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, every ten years
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 element had a downward trend gradually and
valued
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was valued
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 at 13% of contribution in 2000. In terms of
industry
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the industry
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sector
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,
this
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 part had
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a fluctative
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fluctative
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fluctuating
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 trend. The lowest level was at 16% in 1960 and making up at 22% for the rest of the year. As the bar illustrates
that
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the
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 services industry had an upward trend. We can see that in the beginning, It had only 17% of contribution. After the next three decades,
this
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sector
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recorded
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was recorded
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 as the biggest part of India's GDP at 64 % in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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