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A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think the government should increase spending on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

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government
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 has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety.
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, some people think the
government
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 should increase spending on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?A
government
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 has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety.
Therefore
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, some people think the
government
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 should increase spending on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. It's important to say how much you agree or disagree right away.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs for each main idea. This helps the reader follow your thoughts easily.
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Always give specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger.
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You identified a key issue regarding government responsibility, which shows understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social safety net
  • welfare system
  • economic stimulus
  • fiscal responsibility
  • poverty alleviation
  • income inequality
  • government subsidies
  • public health
  • social unrest
  • vulnerable populations
  • national budget
  • public expenditure
  • sustainability
  • redistribution of wealth
  • universal basic income
  • social security
  • healthcare provision
  • educational funding
  • taxpayer money
  • public sector
  • social services
  • means-tested benefits
  • non-profit sector
  • philanthropy
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