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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the contributions of three sectors—agriculture, industry, and services—to India's gross domestic product (
GDP
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) from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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, agriculture experienced a dramatic decline in its share of
GDP
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,
while
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 the services
sector
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 saw significant growth.
In contrast
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, the contribution of the industrial
sector
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 remained relatively stable over the 40-year period. In 1960, agriculture was the dominant
sector
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, accounting for around 60% of India’s
GDP
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.
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, its contribution declined steadily over the decades, dropping to approximately 10% by 2000. Meanwhile, the industrial
sector
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's share was relatively modest at 15% in 1960.
This
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 figure increased slightly to around 25% by 1980 and remained unchanged until the end of the period.
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, the services
sector
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 witnessed a consistent rise. Its contribution stood at just over 15% in 1960 and grew moderately to nearly 30% by 1980. After that, the growth accelerated, with the
sector
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’s share doubling to approximately 60% by 2000.
This
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 surge highlights a major shift in India’s economic structure, as services replaced agriculture as the primary contributor to
GDP
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 over the 40-year span.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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