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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides key information about contributed sectors in
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India's
 gross
domesitc
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domestic
 products for the
last
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 40 years in the past decade.
Overall
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, it clear from the graph that the agriculture
sector
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rate
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 was decreased over
the
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apply
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time
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while
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 the service
sector
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increaded
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increased
.
According to
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 what is shown, the service
sector
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rate
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 in
lndia
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India
 started in 1960 with
the
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a
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 low level
with
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of
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 around 18% and
going
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went
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 up over
time
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untill
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until
 reached over 60% in 2000. At the same
time
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Agriculture
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the Agriculture
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sector
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rate
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 was the most
favorible
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favourable
sector
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amoung
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among
 Indian
consumsers
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consumers
 in 1960 with over 60% and
was
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declined over
time
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untill
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until
 was near 10% in 2000. In terms of
indusial
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the indusial
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sector
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 in
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India
,
it is clear that
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industry
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the industry
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sector
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rate
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 was the lowest
rate
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at
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in
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 1960
with
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at
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 15%
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untill
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until
 reached
his
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its
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 best
preformance
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performance
rate
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 in 1980 with more than 20% and
stay
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stayed
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 the
the
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apply
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same level for the next 20 years
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untill
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until
 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, rate, time, untill with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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