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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart that was given illustrates percentages of
spendings
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spending
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 in five main sections in
United
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the United
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 States, Canada, United Kingdom, and Japan during 2009.
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, it is readily apparent that
use
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the use
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 of funds in segments like food, accommodation, and transportation
took up
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accounted the most.
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, health care and garments constituted a minority. The cost of accommodation for Americans reached 26%,
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 other countries spent just above 20%,
such
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 as just under 25% in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and 21% in Canada. Transportation for Canadians
was
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had
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 the highest ratio
through
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of
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four
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the four
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 countries;
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 people in Japan spent only 10% of
total
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their total
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 income
for
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on
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 commuting.
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, Japan had the highest expenditure
in
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on
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 food, with 23% of their salary among 5 segments and between 4 countries.
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, health care made the lowest indicators in 5 types of
spendings
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spending
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, with a peak of nearly 7% in the US and
trough
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a trough
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 of 2% in the UK. Garments had a bit more
spendings
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spending
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, but
average
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the average
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 is below 5% of
total
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the total
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 income of residents in each country.

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