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Writing Samples
Band 1.5

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email: Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with my recent purchase from your company.
Last
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 week, I placed
the
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an
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 order on Myntra for summer dresses because we are planning to go
for
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on
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 vacation
on
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in
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upcoming
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the upcoming
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 month.
Moreover
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, all dresses have unique styles and
differeent
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different
 colours. Unfortunately, a few
dressess
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dresses
 are very
shorts
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short
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 and my height is 5 feet and 6
inch
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inches
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, so it doesn't
suits
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suit
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 me well. Apart from that, one dress has
separate
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a separate
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 sleeve which is not useful.
However
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, I need a replacement urgently
due to
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 my family trip.
Therefore
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, I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could provide a full refund or replacement of my order. Yours Sincerely, Nirali

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check spelling and grammar carefully. Words like 'differeent' and 'dressess' should be corrected.
coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly separate each part of your email. For example, start each paragraph with a clear point.
task achievement
Include more details about the styles and colors of the dresses to give more context to your dissatisfaction.
task achievement
Explain why the replacement is urgent and how it affects your plans, to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You clearly stated the problem with the dresses you received, which is important.
coherence and cohesion
The format of your email is appropriate for a complaint, including a greeting and a closing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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