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The charts below show the qualifications of staff in an advertising company in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the qualifications of staff in an advertising company in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the staff’s qualifications in a marketing agency from 1990 to 2010.
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, it can be observed that the
first
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degree
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science
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,
master’s
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degree
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arts
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 underwent an upward trend and the
master’s
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degree
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science
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 remained stable
whereas
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 the
first
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degree
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 in art, doctor’s
degree
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along with
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arts
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 decreased during the period.
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, a
master’s
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degree
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science
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 was consistently predominant and a
first
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degree
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arts
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 had the lowest portion. Beginning with the qualifications having staff increased during the timeframe. With respect to a
master’s
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degree
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science
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, the figure just stood at around 27% until the final year. Concurrently, regarding a
master’s
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degree
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 in
arts
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, the data only climbed moderately from 15% to exactly 23% in 2010.
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, concerning the
first
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degree
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science
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, the figure rose modestly by precisely 6% to 24% by the end of the period. Moving
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 the remaining qualifications in a branding agency. In connection with a doctor’s
degree
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arts
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as well as
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science
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, the figures declined slightly with a similar portion, by 5% and 6%, respectively.
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, in terms of
first
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degree
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, the data diminished negligibly from 10% in 1990 to approximately 7% by the end of the timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, degree, science, master’s, arts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Qualifications
  • Advertising company
  • Staff composition
  • High school diploma
  • Bachelor's degree
  • Postgraduate degree
  • Proportion
  • Percentage
  • Trend
  • Decade
  • Workforce
  • Educational qualifications
  • Shift in qualifications
  • Implications
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