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The chart below shows the number of car trips taken by men and women for different purposes per day in a European city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of car trips taken by men and women for different purposes per day in a European city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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given
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bar chart illustrates the quality of car
trips
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 which were taken by both genders for some purposes in one
day
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 in a city in Europe.
Overall
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, it can be observed that
day
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trips
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, sports or entertainment
as well as
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 travelling to work were more attractive to
men
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while
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 visiting friends
along with
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 shopping were more popular with
women
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.
In addition
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, the number of
men
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 travelling to work was predominant and
day
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trips
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 had the lowest number of
women
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. Beginning with the car
trips
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 were more popular with
men
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. With respect to
day
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trips
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, the figure for
men
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 was identical to
women
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, at around 25
people
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.
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, concerning sports or entertainment, the data for
men
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 was slightly higher than for
women
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, at around 125 and approximately 150
people
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.
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, regarding travelling to work, the figure moderately favoured
men
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 over
women
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, amounting to about 350
in contrast
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 with roughly 210
people
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. Moving onto the remaining
trips
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 being more attractive to
women
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. In connection with visiting friends, there were slightly more
women
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, at over 200, than
men
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, at under 200
people
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. Concurrently, in terms of shopping, the data for
men
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 was tangibly lower than for
women
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, at under 200 and approximately 300
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, day, men, women, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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