People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, shopping habits are
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group rather than other reasons. The author of
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statement
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the
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of individuals and the convenience and
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ease of getting things online. One notable reason for
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’s
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. It cannot be denied that individuals’
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are relied
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on their cultures, their traditions and their passions
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so that the way
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live is not dependent on their
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.
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, the young generation sometimes
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to traditional
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markets
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to purchase goods and the
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people
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can use online shopping
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to meet their
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. Another factor
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to consider
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is the comfort of purchasing products from online apps. With the advent of technology, the approach used to buy products
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become easier and more convenient for
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. In
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day and
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,
people
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just stay at their homes and order from various platforms
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as Tiki, Shopee or Amazon rather than go to the markets to purchase things.
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, 50%
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elder
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individuals in Vietnam use smartphones to do online shopping. In conclusion,
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shopping habits
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on the ease and convenience of purchasing online and
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’s
lifestyles
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rather than their
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groups.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your position. You could rephrase the topic statement and include your opinion more clearly.
coherence
Use clearer connections between your ideas. Use linking words like 'Firstly', 'In addition', or 'Finally' to guide the reader through your points.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain your examples and how they support your main points. This will help the reader understand your argument better.
task achievement
You provided examples from both young and old individuals, which shows good understanding of different age groups.
coherence
Your main idea about convenience in shopping is relevant and important. This is a strong point in your essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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