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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well and in good condition, I want to inform you that my student ID
card
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has
Verb problem
was
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loss
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lost
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 when I
have
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had
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accident
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an accident
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 at
the
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apply
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night, please allow me to explain
to
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this to
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 you.
firstly
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, I apologize for
these situation
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this situation
these situations
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of loosing
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loosing
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losing
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 the identification
card
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 of my student, two days ago when I using my motorbike to go to my home back from my University, I
have
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had
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accident
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an accident
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 crash from my motorbike because the weather
realy extream
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really extreme
 rain is obstacle
my
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to my
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 views so
thats
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that
that's
 way causing my bag messy to roads way which there is
lot
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a lot
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 of ID
card
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 my student loss.
Moreover
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, the school exams will
be start
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start
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 in the
one week
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one-week
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leter
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lesson
 on
the Monday
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Monday
a Monday
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 exactly, the
rules
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rule
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 of
exams
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the exams
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 is the students must
be have
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have
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an Id
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Id
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ID
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card
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 identification for following the lesson
leter
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letter
later
, so
thats
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that's
that
way
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why
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 I'm so feel
guitly
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guilty
 to my students because that
card
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it'so
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is
 crucial for them.
Furthermore
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, I would like to request some new
card
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 identification for my students, hope you
understanding
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understand
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for
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apply
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my
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current
curent
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current
 situation and
I'm
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I'd be
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 so
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grateful
greatful
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grateful
 if you hear my letter quickly time, I look forward to hearing from you Best regards, Rizki

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear idea and stick to it. This will help the reader understand your points better.
task achievement
Use correct tenses and clearer sentences to explain your situation. This will make your letter more effective.
suitable writing tone
Check your spelling and grammar to improve the tone of your letter. This will show you are serious and polite.
greeting and closing
You have a clear start and end to your letter, which is good for structure.
complete response
You explained why you need a new card, showing a good understanding of your needs.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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