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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The bar chart outlines the
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 for five categories on the
post- school
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post-school
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educational
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 in Australia and the percentage of males and females had held them in 1999.
Overall
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,
women
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 remarkably take the bigger proportion
in
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of
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 people who
has
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have
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 an undergraduate diploma and Bachelor's degree compared with
men
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 ,
while
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men
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 have
higher
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figure
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 for individuals who held a skilled vocational diploma ,or postgraduation diploma
as well as
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master's
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a master's
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 degree.
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, it is clear to see that almost 95%
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men
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of men
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 kept a skilled vocational certification compared with
women
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 which
were
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 only around 10% in 1999.
furthermore
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,
men
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also
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 notably token higher proportion in public who had postgraduate or master qualifications in Australia , respectively which was 70% for
men
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 which is more than
tiwce
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two
 times than the
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 for girls ( around 30%) ,
that
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 was 60% for
men
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 more over 20% than
women
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 at the given year. On the other side, for people
those
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who
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 had undergraduate and bachelor
academical
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 qualifications in Australia land, girls obviously
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take
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 the higher percentage. Which was approximately 70%, compared with the
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 for boys , around 40%.
At
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 the
last
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 part, females held a little bigger percentage
at
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in
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 the
figure
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 for
person
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people
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 who had a
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree , with 55% in
women
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 and 46% in
men
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • bachelor degrees
  • vocational diplomas
  • certificates
  • gender divide
  • educational trends
  • higher education
  • qualifications
  • disparities
  • predominantly
  • patterns
  • trends
  • illustrates
  • distribution
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