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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The chart depicts the breakdown of various
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 in post-school qualifications in Australia and the percentage of females
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 during 1999.
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 a slight lead on the
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undergraduate
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 and Bachelor’s
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 men outnumbered
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 in the Skilled vocational
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 ,Postgraduate
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,and Master’s
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diploma
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 with 70%,which is
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owners
.Compared with the figure for Bachelor’s
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 between girls and boys who held on
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 in 1999, with 55% and 47% respectively. By
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,fedow container represented the majority both in lower-level qualifications and
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higher-level
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proportion
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diploma
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 with roughly 90% as nine times
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higher than
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however
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 a shrinking in the highest level of degrees, males with 60% and females with 40% in Master’s
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degree
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degrees
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 the data of Postgraduate
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accounting
 for 70% in men and 30% in
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, degree, diploma with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • bachelor degrees
  • vocational diplomas
  • certificates
  • gender divide
  • educational trends
  • higher education
  • qualifications
  • disparities
  • predominantly
  • patterns
  • trends
  • illustrates
  • distribution
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