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Band 2.5

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email: Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing
this
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 letter to explain to you
regarding
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apply
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purchase clothes
was
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apply
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I bought one
days
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day
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 ago at your
fisical
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physical
 store. My name is William, I have visited your shop with my
son
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 and bought
on
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one
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 of your
product
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products
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, the product is a T-shirt long sleeve black colour have a size S and tiger logo in front of that T-shirt.
Furthermore
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, I found the problem from stitching
that
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the
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 clothes and
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a litle
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litle
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little
 hole in the part of
right
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my right
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 arm causing my
son
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cry
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to cry
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 and satisfied and request
to
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me to cover new
cloths
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clothes
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, I will celebrate my birthday
son
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 one week later in a luxury building, so that wat I want to request
to
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you to replace
new
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the new
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 T-shirt, because
its
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it's
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realy
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really
 crucial for
events
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the events
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my
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of my
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son
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. I believe, your shop has
good
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a good
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reputation
repputation
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reputation
 and easy to cover
this
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 matter from your customer, so I want to you understand
into to
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this
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matter
metter
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matter truly
trully
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truly
 and I look forward to hearing from you Regards, William

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grammar
Make sure to use correct grammar and spelling for better clarity. For example, 'fiscal store' should be 'physical store'.
cohesion
Ensure that sentences flow smoothly. You can use linking words like 'also' and 'because' to connect ideas better.
structure
Focus on clearly stating your problem and request in separate short paragraphs to make it easier to follow.
task achievement
The email includes important details like the product description and the urgency for replacement, which are good aspects of task achievement.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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