Some countries allow the young above 18 years to drive,drink or married. Some countries don't. Give reasons along with personal experience and what do you think is the ideal age for taking adult responsibilities.

It's a very debatable issue around the world which
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should be considered the correct
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when a
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is considered to start making
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on his own. Generally seen, the
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of 18 is widely
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acceptable
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worldwide when an individual should be responsible for his own actions, whilst, in some countries, a higher
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as 19, 20 or 21 is considered the accurate
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. I believe 18 is the correct
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when a
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should be accountable for his actions or must be responsible for making
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for his own life, towards his family and society. I will explain both sides
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my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. In some countries, especially in Southeast Asia, decades ago, a common trend
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that at the
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of 14-15, youth commenced to manage their family business or start earning by doing labour, or a job, and got married early too. They believed that after getting primary education, they are
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enough to think about their bad and good.
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, societies
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that a
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is capable enough to handle their work, once an individual
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to earn, he is eligible to make their own
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in terms of job, marriage, driving, drinking, voting etcetera. Though
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trend is not acceptable nowadays,
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the truth cannot be ignored that
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of them are able to perform their life duties successfully,
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, governments made
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of 18 based on previous trends,
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of setting high
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limits. On the other side, in some countries, people opine that up to 18, a
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is still in the teenage period, not have enough wisdom to make important
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in his life on his own. In
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general
, teenage is considered
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the developing
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, when a
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's mental abilities are still
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growing,
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considered after completing 19, when a
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stepped
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into 20,
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only he is capable of making
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,
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, some think that up to 21, they are in adulthood
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, so they could perform wrong actions before 21,
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, they should be allowed to take responsibilities after passing their adulthood time
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21. In conclusion, I would wrap up my essay with my opinion that we are now living in a globalised world, and all the people living in
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world have the same capabilities,
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, there must be a standard
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to be considered
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adulthood
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, and adult
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, so that same
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limits must be set in each country.

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