You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to you to
expalin
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explain
my problem
in
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the accommodation
room
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, and I am asking you to change it
from
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the next year. The main issue is the timing for my
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room mate
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roommate
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, he is studying his
lessions
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lessons
at night
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while
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this
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not suitable for me
,
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because I am
sleping
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sleeping
early so I can wake up early for my lectures. One more reason is he used to be messy with his clothes.
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, I asked him many times to be organized
,
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and clean the
room
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inregular
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regular
basis, but he did not listen to my
advise
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.
Last
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but not least, I
prefered
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preferred
to change to
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room
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a room
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with
bigger
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a bigger
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one, so I can study well, to clarify, I am studying engineering and I need some space for my tools.
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, the best choice for me is
single
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a single
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room
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. I am looking forward to
hear
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from you soon. Best Regards, Mostafa

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task response
Make sure to clearly explain your problems in more detail. For example, you could say how your roommate's late-night study affects your rest.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better. You can use words like 'also' or 'for example' to link your sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling. For instance, 'explain' is spelled incorrectly, and 'lessons' should replace 'lessions'.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your main problems with the accommodation.
task achievement
Your request for a single room is clear and justified.
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