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Some people support the idea of imposing taxes on fossil fuels (oil, coil and gas) in order to reduce energy consumption. Other people disagree with this approach. Consider the debate and its arguments, and come to your own conclusion.

In today's globalized world,
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 some proponents argue that imposing
taxes
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 on fossil
fuels
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 is a better idea for reducing
energy
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 consumption, others advocate that it is not a viable measure for the issue.
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 imposing
taxes
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 has a few disadvantages, I firmly believe that it offers greater advantages.
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 essay will examine both merits and drawbacks, supporting my perspective, and providing relevant examples, before reaching a well-justified conclusion. The primary issue of taxation on fossil
fuels
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 is the increasing living
cost
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, especially in developing nations. Nowadays, 99% of areas are dependent on fossil
fuels
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, not only
transportation
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in transportation
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,
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 but
also
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factories
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in factories
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, infrastructures and other industries.
Consequently
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, living
cost
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 is increased, demonstrating a high value of inflation. Sri Lanka,
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, recently, just after the
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COVID-19
 pandemic crisis, experienced a high
cost
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 of living.
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 mainly happened
due to
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 the high taxation rate that the government imposed.
On the other hand
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, there are several significant advantages of
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 approach. One of the main positive aspects is the reducing environmental deterioration, which is the main global issue in the 21st century. Another notable plus point is that researchers, scientists, and governments try to search for alternative sources of fossil
fuels
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.
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, the world is gradually shifting to renewable
energy
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,
such
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 as wind, solar, and geothermal
energy
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. The significance of these sustainable
energy
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 methods comes after imposing high
taxes
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 on fossil
fuels
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.
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, researchers have revealed that
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 reduced
the
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environmental issues by nearly half by 2050, compared to the current levels. In conclusion, taking everything into account,
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 reiterate my strong belief that the advantages of imposing high
taxes
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 on fossil
fuels
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, including the increasing finding of alternatives (sustainable sources) and the reducing environmental issues (global warming), far outweigh its drawbacks,
such
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 as the increased the
cost
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 of living.

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Make sure to clearly define both sides of the argument in your introduction.
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Include more examples to support your points. Use clear reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' for better flow.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar errors, such as 'i' should be 'I'.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion throughout your essay.
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The essay addresses important environmental issues related to fossil fuels.
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